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Legend Of The Moonhorse pg. 5 by ~Mondpferd:iconMondpferd:

Categories Cartoons & Comics > Traditional Media > Comics > Pages

©2009 ~Mondpferd
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Yaaay! Page 5 is up :boogie: It's slowly getting exciting :giggle:
I hope you can read my hand written texts ^^;
I think I have to learn a lot about story telling and planning of panel positions ... just when I finished this page I thought it would have been better if I had added one or two more panels :giggle:
And I hope the texts I write are at least a bit sensibel because I didn't write them in German first...I wrote them from the beginning in English and I guess this could be a fault :D ..so if you find any mistakes...please tell me! thanks :rose:

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*AnoraAlia Jul 12, 2009, 7:59:36 AM
Ich mag es! :D
Und ich denke nicht, dass deine Panel-Aufteilung nicht in Ordnung wäre - Ich finde sie eigentlich richtig gut.

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Mood: Love *sealle Jul 12, 2009, 8:00:20 AM
the 2nd and 2nd last panel are a bit confusing.. i think the 2nd one is supposed to say "and i promise you will always be safe if i'm near"... but im not sure about the 2nd last one..

otherwise its looking amazing and i cant wiat for the next installment!! your horses are so inspiring!

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~Pilialoha-95 Jul 12, 2009, 8:20:03 AM
I think the second to last panel should be :He changed so much recently." I think that will help make it easier to understand. :) But great so far! Keep going!

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~Mondpferd Jul 12, 2009, 8:23:05 AM
Thank you very much for correcting me...I'll correct it as soon as possible :aww:
:hug:

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~Pilialoha-95 Jul 12, 2009, 8:27:37 AM
No problem! :glomp:

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You have just unwittingly stepped into "The Twilight Zone." This area of "The Twilight Zone" is a mad place where people waste away their sad, pointless lives reading other peoples' Signatures.
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~Mondpferd Jul 12, 2009, 8:28:29 AM
I'm sorry for confusing you ^^; I think I know now what I did wrong in the 2nd panel! I thoughnt 'near' means the same as 'nearness' xDD Would it be better understandable if I write 'you will always be save in my nearness'? ...and I got the hint that the 2nd last panel would be better understandable if I write 'He changed so much recently'...what do you think?

Thank you very much :hug:

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~XoLilSquirtoX Jul 12, 2009, 8:29:08 AM
i like your comic so far, i was going to comment o the 2nd and 2nd last panel but it looks like someone else got to it first. :)

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~PerlinoQHLova Jul 12, 2009, 2:15:09 PM
safe instead of save, maybe 'you'll always be safe near me?'
its looking great!
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~tigerskull Jul 13, 2009, 7:35:03 AM
ja ich bin schon gespannt wies weiter geht^^
also ich mags wie du die Pannles aufteilst
und mit der Zeit wirst du sicher auch ein gutes Gefühl dafür bekommen^^

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Give me a bullet, I change your life."
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